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Ravindra
from Noida |

Hi All,

        Just expressing my own desires. 

Thanks.

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Aditya Tibrewala
from Mumbai |

you need to improve your grammar. Ive copied a segment of your post and I'm giving you an example as to how it should actually be:

How does it seem when someone arrives on this earth with a tag of a 'girl' which is considered as asecond entity in this man dominated world.What i feel when i am the most vulnerable entity, easily persuaded.From day one when i opened my eyes in this worldI wanted to feel my parents anxiety on how i compete in this world because i am a GIRL.

there are numerous more corrections that have to be made which i cannot do, cause i really don't know what are you trying to express through the above extract.

sorry for the criticism, but i hope it helps. :)

Ravindra
from Noida |

Thanks Aditya..

                        I just avoid this rule:(

                       No need to say sorry....there's always two sides.  

                       Trying to improve in another post.

Thanks again.